Seemed to look up at me, questioning, eyes lost in a mire
There’re so many, then why did you choose me, you liar!
I believed your heart your words then so pure
But I can’t trust them to be yours any more
Don’t think you can possess me for you’re left with no desire
You now belong to the crowd who can only look and admire
Hoped that someday you’ll return to me or at least you
Wished for long, that you forget everything to start new
Gosh! can’t believe you’re the same, acting so meek
But now it’s getting late and you’re making me weak
Cry if you feel like, but that won’t get you me, Sire!
The one thing you need, if you care still, is the fire!
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For then, no goal remains huge and no aim too high
You’ve won half the battle just when you say aye!!
For those struggling to make something out of it ... the 'I' in the poem is the 'Goal' of the person talking to him and the 'YOU' is the person.
Inspired by : Aishwarya Singh
21 comments:
Haan to kaun bol raha tha ki may mein bhi blogs likhe the.
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waise yeh blog sach mein samajh a gaya:)..and apun impressed:)
Voila!!! After almost three months...thanks to AP for his continued efforts in inspiring the writer in you...kudos to him...clap clap :)
oh...forgot to complement your creation...
Rebellion this time !!! huh !!! ;)
:) shift from the trend!
But its a zero sum game ma'm. Seasonality feeds upon itself and the trend line is the 0.
PS: Don't even try to ask me wht tht means...
@ Aishwarya: thanks but all coz of you i cudn't write in may n june :(:p .. didn't get the requisite inspiration ...
@ shreyans: thanks so much .. :)
yeah ... on second thought rebellion cud have been another name of this poem .. hmmmm ...
thanks again :)
@ aakash: wudn't ask you the meaning even in my next birth ... but abhi trend se aur door jana hai :)
hmmm... achhi inspiring poem hai ...
hmmn,lag raha tha pad ki kahani me twist hoga ,pehli baar koi poem bina teacher ke samajh aa gaye...
well written aditi!!
Good one !!!!
keep it up,
your readers want more
Der aayi par Durust aayi... Good one... KIU
gud one !!!!!
That too coming at good time .....when one is realy down reading such a phrase indulges a fightin spirit...
Nice composition :)
mast likha hai...........but again teri tareef karke kya fayda....
inspiration to aish hai na.;)
mujhe to tere sare blogs samajh aa jate hain. but ismein mujhe note padka pata chala... u r talking about goals
Hey ... cool .... Sahi hai yaar it was very good but eek baat samajh nahi aayi ... yeh aishwarya kon hai?
hmmm inspired by Aish ....i m impressed..... :) nice read ...but way above my level .i guess i wud have to take "advice" from the guru..how to understand it :-P
thanks so much .... all of you !! :))
wud try to put something more comprehensible next time !!
off all the poems you have written, this one seems to have amazing flow..
waise just a suggestion, try the same theme but without any mechanics and rhyming sentences.. This is good but then that would just simply ROCK !!
hmm ... yeah sure ... would try it :)
thanks..
Where to begin.... first word that comes to mind contradictory ..but must say its an interesting read really interesting ....in fact i went through it few times and really loved it ....amazingly creative and very different :-)))
Nice piece of writing there. Especially the line, "The one thing you need, if you care still, is the fire!" - takes the cake for me..It is one of those gems that deserve to be on a poster that adorns your wall..Lovely!
- Sameer
http://sams-world.rediffblogs.com
Initially i thot the 'me' here is 'you'..!! and was just wondering as to whoz the lucky one!!
bt then.. thanx for the clarification towards the end.. another nice one.. enjoyed reading it thoroughly!!
and remember.. this is not my first time.. but enjoyed it just as much..!!
thanks so much shishir! :)
nitin, do look for the ones coming up!!
thanks a lot sameer :) the comment was a little surprise!!
Wow!
well, could this GOAL also be a person??
awesome poem, powerfull stuff!
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