A chequered olive table cloth, an apple tart with cream
And a mug full of Irish coffee, sneaking from the brim
Rays of new sunlight through a colored window glass
Above few long stemmed roses in a tall bamboo vase,
An oak tree nearby, stretching to reach the window sill
And a path down to the woods beyond the chalet's frill
The sky drew shades of caramel and gold in odd ratios
As a puff of air nudged few leaves dozing on the patio
She lifted the bow to draw across the strings of her violin
And bowed her head, eyes closed, fingers contemplating
Like a misty breeze it stirred every cell of her body
And gushed out through her form in pure rhapsody
In the capriccio were entwined her sense and her soul
Her wish to reach out and seek the world unexplored!!
For that moment she was nothing but the melody itself
With a resolve on the New Year day to just be herself!
34 comments:
I envy your poetic sense as you somehow get your words right to make it sound great...The flow of the poem was perfect to feel the picture in mind and the context was set tight, but just expected a little more on the Capriccio (music) part...
Well twined into the rhythm of the existence for being completely & sublimely absorbed into self :-)
Gave my mind a refreshing and a tantalizing effect (after reading).
Still relishing the Capriccio effect :)
Awesome read..
very mesmerizing & tinkling effect it had on me :)
truly spellbinding...
acts as a tonic to jaded brain...
:)))
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good work done :)
Written very well.. The best part is the description can be visualised easily :)
in my a opinion, a very well composed flow of thoughts.. in pure harmony. I agree completely with an earlier comment that the poem allows one to visualize the emotions and settings very easily.
Excellent one Aditi. Great flow of thoughts and beautifully written. A very good poem and a nice one for reading. U hav a great talent and pls keep writing more such poems. :-)
Good one girl.. Keep it up.. Waiting for more!!
Very sweetly carved lyrics..Good job!! Now all we need is a dozen more..and we have an album..I see a future..Keep it up Aditi!!
nice one Aditi, Its a nice poetic expression of self realization..
Keep it up :-)
The freedom of music embodied in self in the last line is beautiful. Amazing poem
Wonderful thoughts woven into a beautiful words. Kudos to the writer.
Amazing word play and strong sense of imagination. Bravo!
Marvellous!! Great Work! wondering why the talent was kept hidden for so long ....
awesome aditi:)please make sure its not the "talent unused"
as always, your description and focus on small set of events is infectious. It came all so lively.
However, as discussed, would really love to see a poem from you which is light- both in terms of expressions as well as subject:)
Nice comments this time…..Keep writing my cute little poet:)
Hey Aditi, Never knew that you are a poet too..its amazing, great imagination and clarity of thoughts..
Hy Aditi very well written. . .You always come up with surprises first your love for adventure, then dance and now poems. . .Great going keep it up !!!
Awesome re... well Written :)
coming straight from ur heart.
Wallah ! Tum bohat aaccha likhti... hum sheikh ko bolti....woh bohat khush hoti...
awesome... simple and beautiful... it has been written in flow... straight from heart types. and its a happy one... so tht makes it better....
Truly good piece of art.. The words are jus Perfeccct to describe the essence of the message..
Keep up the good work..
In other words, the "Experience" while reading was refreshing... :)
Happy New Year :))
Awesome work! It was a bit abstract for me to understand, but made complete sense, once I took that extra effort! The title is ironical, looking at the way you've used the rhyming ends!
Wonderfully written.. To be frank.. I didnt know what Capriccio meant.. So the first few lines actually made me think it was something related to coffee, cappuccino something like that.. and I was able to relate to it... then a google search made me realize its an art.. now in this new ART sense, the poem becomes perfect... because it lets the reader have his/her own interpretations.. his or her own aspirations of what he wants to be in the new year.. and still maintains the connect to the nature ( his own old self of last year) through the middle part of oak tree..
Deep thinking.. FABULOUS :-)
Well written Aditi. Your command over the language is great. Do write more often and pleaase make that trip to Ladakh.:)
Wonderful Work Aditi, Keep coming more of those...
The way you have described a small coffee outing entwined with the essence of life made it mesmerizing...
very well composed flow of thoughts.. in pure harmony and rythem and clarity of thoughts..
. the poem allows one to visualize the emotions.
It says it all...:)
Very well written..never knew you have such creative juices hidden inside you..
keep them flowing dear.. will wait for more to cum :)
Amazing expression...hats off to your poetic prowess... i am craving for more :)
Beautifully written Aditi :)... De best part of ur writing is dat ur poems creates a vivid picture in my mind as I read dem... De same happened for dis one too...
I cud actually picture myself in dat poem doing all those things... De ending was de cherry on de cake wid a msg for everyone dis new year to be themselves...
way to go :)....
thanks so much to all of you for the appreciation and critical judgements .. hoping to meet your expectation next time too !!
@rushit: it did end a li'l early ..
@ linus: thanks for such acute analysis :)
Simply amazing !!!! Have never read such a beauty with so much of simplicity...we dont know each other ...but a bond that binds us together is SPJCM...keep it up :))
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